Full Animatic - 'Train' (Working Title...)

Here is my full animatic for Trey Hocks: 'Beyond the Frame' - Pre-Production Class.

Sound is place holder for now! Just there to help you watch it. Funny how sound makes the cuts seem faster!

I need heavy critique, guys. Have at it!

Thanks for all the love!

EDIT: I've changed the beginning since I last posted this. I like the viewer to be confused about the relationship between the guy and hat girl until the pay off at the end.

Also... I need a better title.